By: Tatl
What bugs me sometimes is the total lack of description that
people have, or TOO much description. I have read some fanfics that make me
want to punch my fist in to the computer. I've read other ones that after 5
minutes I get so bored I just stop reading. I read one fan fic that had almost
NO description. There was a fire in Serena's house and her whole family
died. So she runs to Darien's house and says, "Darien, my whole family is
dead, can I stay with you?" HELLO? This made me want to like flame the
author!
Well I didnt, but I wanted too. Anyway, dont you think that Serena
would be overcome with grief, that she would cry in Dariens arms, that Darien
would comfort her??? Here is an example of too much description: Serena
entered her room. There was a pink window on one side and in the middle of the
room was her pink ruffly bed with angels on it. next to that was her desk
with tons of papers and pencils on it. On the left side of her bed was a
bookcase with a radio and a large collection of barbie dolls. one shelf had cd's
and magazines... Blah blah blah. I dont CARE! A good description for a room
could be: Serena entered her room. There was a single window over her
pink bed. Her desk was a mess and the bookcase had a large collection of
barbie dolls. That's it! We dont care where the bed is or what is on her
covers! It also bugs me like hell when people describe a character like this: She
had blue eyes and brown hair and was tan. Maybe you could say something
like she had a sad look in her eyes, her brown hair was long and went past her
back, she had tan skin that glowed in the sun. That's a little better.
Remember that description isnt everything in a story, but it's a major
part that adds to the beauty of the plot. Of course, if your plot sucks,
description can't make up for that.
Which reminds me. Plots. There are some plots that I have seen
OVER and OVER again. Ok here is an example: Queen Crystallia has a plan to take
over the world. She decides to drain energy. The scouts stop her. She wants
to kill them. Eventually the scouts kill her off. This plot is overused
over and over again. Also this "Crystallia" or whatever the villain is
called is usually just bad and looks evil and wants to avenge beryl or something.
Bad guys dont just WANT to kill unless they were brought up that way. But
sometimes, people make them want to kill for the dumbest reason. Like
someone teased them too much or avoided them because of their looks or
likes. Ok, that is pretty mean but you're not going to go KILL someone
for that! Like wow you're so mean, I'm going to take this knife and stab
you! Now, maybe if that person killed their family and home, now they may
have a reason for murder. Also, I'm not saying that people dont do this, but I
dont usually see the bad guy as an actual GUY. It's usually beryl or evil
queen sapphire or crystallia or universe etc. So before writing your story,
think about what the other person might expect and then sort of do the
opposite.
And there is another thing to writing fan fiction that you have all
heard before over and over. Just HAVE FUN!
Comments on this article can be sent to: Tatl.
